Internet Connections - band 7
The line graph given above illustrates the proportion of UK residents using two different kinds of internet services from April 2003 to July 2005.
Overall, It is very obvious from the information provided that the number of internet users was increased in the time period shown. Although the British people switched their preferences between the two internet services studied. In the start of the study period, Narrowband was the most popular in the list of internet services among the people of the UK when more than one third of them preferred it over others. The utilization of Narrowband, however, fluctuated between 30-38% until October 2004.After that there was a slight decline of 6% in next seven months followed by 1% recovery at the end of the survey when 1 in 4 of the Britain houses was having this internet service.
On the other hand, Broadband popularity which started from 10% in the earlier part of 2003,soared continuously up to 30% until May 2005 which made it the most famous internet service of that time. In the last two months the broadband sales remained stabilized.
In conclusion, with the passage of time more and more homes in the United Kingdom were equipped with the internet facilities. Moreover. the inhabitants over there started to opt for Broadband rather than Narrowband like old times.
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Task Achievement
The most important information from the graph has been covered accurately, with an overview to depict the overall trend. The information is described with some supporting statistics. (7)
Coherence & Cohesion
The information has been organised logically with some good linking devices to sequence the information. (7.5)
Lexical Resource
A range of descriptive vocabulary has been used to describe the changes in the figures in an interesting way. (7)
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
This report shows reasonable control of sentence and grammar structures, although there are inaccuracies with verb tenses and prepositions. (7)
Overall Comment - how to improve
This was a good attempt at the task with descriptions of most of the main features and some comparisons between them. Vocabulary shows range but verb tenses need to be checked to ensure a higher degree of accuracy in grammar.
