Best Way Home - band 8
The flow chart illustrates things to consider in order to arrive home free from harm. Overall, we can identify that in-spite of some detours and considerations, arriving safely at home can be achieved by following either the primary or the alternate method.
Delving with the diagram, after leaving the office, checking for the time and weather is vital. If the weather is clear and the time is before 5 pm, then you can proceed with your secondary assessment. However, in the event a bad weather took place and time passes beyond 5 pm, the need to take an alternate “A” home is implied to arrive safely.
Meanwhile, going to your secondary assessment means you need to identify whether the primary route is experiencing heavy traffic or not. If proven congested then divert to alternate “B” to reach your goal of arriving safely. On the contrary, if the main road is not having too much vehicle, then you may take it and drive home with ease.
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Task Achievement
This is a very good report which includes all of the necessary information and the details are clearly given. (8)
Coherence & Cohesion
There is overall progression of response and paragraphing is used well to separate the steps. Appropriate use of linking devices creates cohesion throughout the report. (8)
Lexical Resource
Some good vocabulary has been used that is appropriate for the task although a wider range of impersonal phrases would increase the score. (7.5)
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
The report shows some range of structures, but again this needs to be widened for a higher score. (7.5)
Overall Comment - how to improve
A good report that highlights all the necessary information. To improve, try to check for small errors at the end of writing and work on including a wider range of grammatical structures.