IELTS writing test - sample answers

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Ambition - band 8.5

Although it is sometimes argued that millennials ought to have ambitions, other people think that it is fine if they do not focus on pursuing big aims in life. In my opinion, I consider that being ambitious is the key in a successful career and a happy life.

On the one hand, some people consider that having young individuals who are trying to fulfil their dreams is vital in order to succeed and I agree. In other words, a sense of purpose in life motivates them to excel in their studies or tasks which, consequently, produces better academic performance and career achievements later in life. For example, Barack Obama was the first African-American president of the USA due to his hard work and ambitions for status and achievements. Furthermore, those driven individuals could have a positive impact on society because they could solve environmental problems or make improvements that affect wider percentage of the population.

On the other hand, it is often believed that it is better to put less pressure on young people because not every person has a dream to be in a high-status and well-paid job. As society, we need to have all types of people and workers, such as manual workers, and not only people who want to be leaders or have a place in a boardroom. Thus, putting that strain on millennials can affect them in a negative way and this can lead to a burn out syndrome or even to a depression.

In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that young people who are ambitious and have a vision in their life stand a better chance to succeed and this is vital for having the healthy society and the happy life.

 

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Task Achievement

The candidate addresses the task question well and discusses all aspects with clarity. The response is well-developed and ideas are supported. (8.5)

Coherence & Cohesion

The essay can be understood without difficulty. All aspects of cohesion are handled well. Each paragraph addresses a central topic and linking within sentences shows flexibility. (8.5)

Lexical Resource

The range of vocabulary is good and appropriate to the topic. There is evidence of an awareness of style and less common expressions. (8)

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The candidate uses a range of structures well to communicate her ideas and errors are extremely rare. (8)

Overall Comment - how to improve

This is an excellent response to the task question. Arguments are relevant and well-supported and the candidate's point of view is clearly expressed through a wide and accurate range of language and lexis. A revision of when to use articles would improve the accuracy but overall there is very little error.

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