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1.4.2 Riverville Hotels - Sample

The graph shows the trend rate at which three Riverville hotels in the town of Riverville were booked during a tourist seasons and the contributing factors.

In June, the number of occupied rooms were was lower than other months in all the hotels because of the train strike which took place over four days. Just around 30 to 50% were occupied in Park Hotel, Lakeside, hotels and the Hotel Lux.

In July all the hotels reached a peak in all the hotels with bookings of about 95% in Hotel Lux. Lakeside and Park Hotels had approximately the same booking rate of 80%. This was because of the Arts festival held from the 3rd to the 12th of July.

It The graph further illustrates that August had saw significant bookings in Park Hotel and Hotel Lux because of the regional sports championships from the 15th to 19th August. Both had similar figures of almost 80% of occupied rooms respectively. The least booked was Lakeside with just about 20%, a significantly low rate which was affected mainly by the fire on the 12th of July.

Finally, the chart clearly indicates that most bookings were influenced by festivals and sporting occasions.

Task Achievement

Very strong – all the main factors and how they affected the hotels' success have been explained clearly.

Coherence & Cohesion

Good – well-structured and logically ordered but need to increase range of linking words.

Lexical Resource

Good – clear attempt to use appropriate vocab for describing data.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Good – mistakes occur when attempting more complex sentences but in general, structures are accurate.

Overall

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