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2.6.1 Traditional Culture - Sample

The new technology is gradually destroying our culture and its components. It is the driving force behind social change, imposing its own logic on the actors and their relations like use of languages [not sure this is relevant here], transforming our traditional norms and values.

First of all, technology has abolished the social interaction between families, friends and the society in different ways. For instance, most people spend time indoors watching television and surfing the internet. The use of advanced communication techniques like video cassettes as teaching aids, instead of face to face community events, has also affected the society negatively. [the question is about culture not really about relationships and communication]

In addition to that, our talent and culture is disappearing in the sense that we copy from celebrities in on the internet and television. Culture determines the way in which individuals are identified and recognised, therefore we are wiping out/away our specific values by external behaviours inspired by foreign technology. I would also argue that we are not challenging our mental and academic capabilities as we copy different lifestyles and their ideas, which means we are not innovative.

The Appropriate measures could be imposed to link culture and technology. This will would bring enhance the developments of our living standards, which include social, political and cultural spheres. For instance, the use of media and communication to understand different cultures and values. This could expand our horizons by looking at a wide range of cultural information.

In conclusion, the protection of cultural identity and reinforcing it are of vital importance. We could accept the realities of the present world and protect our culture by the use of the new technology.

Task Achievement

Satisfactory – clear position but some parts are not relevant to the question which should be about technology and its impact on traditional culture.

Coherence & Cohesion

Good – well-structured with sufficient range of linking words.

Lexical Resource

Very good – wide range of vocab used to convey precise meanings.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Good –. Uses a variety of structures and sentences are generally error-free.

Overall

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