IELTS writing test - sample answers

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2.3.1 University Admission - Sample

Many people dream to of live having a high standard of life living, by doing a highly paid and secured jobsand to get more respect in the community, so they are going to university more than in the past. But comparatively, thelife has become more hectic due to more stress and responsibilities.

Because of overpopulation and a few incidents like ’ Global Recession Period’, resulting in shortage of general job vacancies, most people agree that it’s better to go to for university studies and become highly qualified person. As a result, one can not only get a high level job post but also earn enough money in short period (like Bank Executives) rather than spending their whole life on minimum wages working as a less qualified person.and also The advance in techonology has also had a great impact, replacing many people’s jobs especially in the agricultural fields industry, realizing making/forcing/encouraging them (to) go for job-related vocationalcourses by which they can do work faster and more effectively. For example, a degree in Technology in Agriculture or Mechanical Engineeringcourse through university.

In my opinion, in proffessional jobs workers like doctors and lawyers are spending most of their life period to being trained and before starting to work and managing to earn a higher income with more respect. However, I think most of them are not able to cope with the job’s responsibility and stress. In fact, there are so many universities which gives the opportunity to do online courses.

In conclusion, the advantages of going to university in order to get higher qualifications outweigh the disadvantages. It has had an incredible impact in the progress of developing countries like India. In addition, with theadvance in techonolgy, it’s possisble to share work or to do job from your/the computer so that one can maintain a good work-life balance and avoid stress-induced health problems.

Red = corrections

Green = suggested improvements

Word count - 281

Minimum word count: 250          

Task Achievement

Satisfactory – you need to present a clearer position and support your ideas/views with relevant examples and reasons.

Coherence & Cohesion

Good – you link your sentneces well with appropriate linkers.

Lexical Resource

Good – appropriate vocab showing awareness of collocation.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Satisfactory - Good range of structures but simple errors still persisting.

Overall

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