1.2.1 Public Transport - Sample
The bar charts illustrate the use of public transport in various parts of the world. Different countries have different amounts of usage of public transport and the metro system.
To begin with, public transport in the USA has the smallest proportion (only 2%), whereas Japan has the biggest one (46%). In addition, the UK has half the amount of transport use of Spain.
Moreover, the metro system in some of these countries and others vary. For instance, London’s metro system carries the least number of passengers; 784 million in one year. However, the metro system of Moscow takes the biggest number of people; 3184 million in one year. Furthermore, Seoul’s metro spends one third the length spent by London’s metro, and it’s the smallest length compared to the biggest one which is New York’s network of420 kilometres.
are is a big large number of people using the metro system especially in Moscow. In addition, public transport is much more used in Japan than anywhere else.
Red = corrections
Green = suggested improvements
Word count - 163
Minimum word count: 150
Satisfactory – try to extend your answer more fully by making more significant comparisons.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good – information links well but there is a danger of overuse.
Satisfactory – appropriate but not used a wide range of expressions.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
Satisfactory – simple sentence forms used accurately.
You need to make more significant comparisons between the data - look at what is similar and what is different and try to group that information together. > iPass Module – Household Spending